Loading reply snippet...I'd agree that Psycholonials is more focused just because it has two or three characters having these discussions instead of twenty. As far as an enjoyable reading experience goes - the bare minimum change required would be making the dysfunction that plagues the characters in the epilogues have some kind of real root behind it. The political plot, is there terrorism going on in the background? Are people being hurt? The dumb Candy relationship parodies, are there real lasting adverse effects that come from people suddenly behaving (more) like fanfic characters? Stakes? This isn't the One True Way to try and write this story, just a basic low effort way to try and inject some drama and pathos where there really isn't much.