This will function similarly to the MSPFA Discord Adventure Reviews thread. If you're not familiar, you leave your adventure link up (at least 50 pages are required), and others read it and give you constructive criticism. If you're not looking for that, this is not the thread for you, sorry.
I don't currently have an adventure up, but if you're looking for something to review right out of the bat, feel free to check out Gamma Session. It never quite got off the ground due to me not having planned out any of its late game and reusing a lot of Homestuck story elements to the point of excess, but I would be happy to get anything extra from it as well. https://mspfa.com/?s=62211&p=1
i havent updated in a minute, but here's my sleuthlike. https://mspfa.com/?s=50949&p=1 i'm a big fan of Maximal Bullshit in these sorts of things.
Oh this is a nice thread to have!
Just make sure to keep critism constructive! If anyone is just being mean please report it!
I'm a person... Probably.
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RE:Myself
*Criticism
I'm a person... Probably.
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RE:meat I commented on the last page of your adventure, but here's a mirror in case you happen to see this thread again:
"First of all, can we talk about how fantastic this adventure concept is? Since it's a flipjam entry, I assume it was based on the theme, and honestly that is an amazing stroke of genius. Having multiple timelines display and be controlled at once is such a fun idea, especially with shared inventory encouraging messing around with doomed timelines and causing schasms. The global mechanics also add a lot of depth here. Totally up a fan-adventure's alley.
I really like the humor and writing of this, it's very Sleuth-like and I think it's nice. Besides some syntax errors here and there, it's all good. I'm not experienced with early MSPA art but I think that's also very accurate.
My only strong complaint is the vertically stacked text gets a little hard to connect to their panels sometimes. I would personally line them up interchangably, but it doesn't take away from the experience.
You should update this again sometime!"
thanks a heap! i've been experimenting with mspfa formats for years now and this is easily the one i'm proudest of. i definitely agree that the stacked text is a little awkward, but i think alternating them would mess with the full form of the thing--the final intent is to have 9 simultaneous timelines! so the fully stacked grid is very important in that regard. also, i actually came up with it before the flipjam started! the idea for it was part of the reason i chose that prompt for the flipjam that year LOL. i started and ran the flipjam until just this year!
RE: syntax errors, do you remember where those were? i feel like ive given it countless proofing passes but i'm always missing stuff.
Hi! :D
https://mspfa.com/?s=64029&p=1
My MSPFA is only just over 50 pages and only just starting out. I'm trying to make it the best i can so I'd appreciate some criticism
I'd love for some people to take a look at my fanventure, Lairhold, I recently began updating it again after the new Homestuck:BC killed my burnout, and I want to know what the general public thinks about it.(Note, while Lairhold has a warning for sexually explicit content, it is not and never will be the main focus of the comic, and anything that happens to contain sexual material is small and is warned of beforehand, with an option to skip. Regardless, viewer digression is advised)
https://mspfa.com/?s=61613&p=1
@minermate
hey! me and a few friends stumbled upon lairhold near its start! i was somewhat active in your discord for a while pre-hiatus, it’s great so far and i am loving the energy! happy to hear it’s coming back around!
reach out on discord @cytosol for moderation-related help!
@meatman
I actually remember reading this, because I used that guy's office as inspiration for a Sleuthlike panel I made for fun, which I later used to start a forum adventure here. (This is actually the second time you've inspired me to make a fan adventure, since Prospit Sleuth inspired Crud Spade)
I like it a lot, but really I like anything that can faithfully copy the Problem Sleuth style. The timeline splitting is a really inventive gimmick, which I think is important for any good sleuthlike. It's easier to copy the art style and vocabulary of problem sleuth than it is to copy its imagination and creativity. Like that second part is actually really hard.
That said, its pretty short. I like my sleuthlikes to be scrawling nonsense that quickly grow out of control, and that can't really be accomplished in only 51 pages. Though I suspect that's a consequence of the gimmick being pretty demanding.
https://mspfa.com/?s=59517&p=1 =read my yessburb sleuþl:ke
I always like hearing about what people have to say about Hoxxesbound! https://hoxxesbound.mspfa.com/?p=1
(also hi Lumi)
"DEAD HAND DEALT" is a fanventure myself and my friends have been working on. Things are still early, but we're trying to keep a semi-consistent upd8 schedule!
(Hi Meat, Lumi, and Hobs...!)
https://mspfa.com/?s=52851&p=1
Forgot to actually link the adventure like a genius -->
https://mspfa.com/?s=52851&p=1
https://mspfa.com/?s=52851&p=1
Here's an MSPFA I started off with no plan half-seriously in a Discord server, it's called "accountant tale"
It starts off like Homestuck (which I now regret) but it's quite different from it trust me please trust me.
The art sucks, yeah, but I hope that you find it funny and interesting anyway.
The first anniversary recently came and went and I did literally nothing to celebrate, fuck my stupid chud life
Please help me make it good.
https://mspfa.com/?s=59260&p=1
exposure to dimethylmercury is the most common cause of death in my hometown
flames will be used to roast marshmallows
