I'm very happy with how it turned out! If it does get greenlit for a full series, hopefully having multiple episodes per season and an expanded runtime would allow them to slow down the pacing a bit; I think that would allow them to let Dave's character be more true to the comic. To me, Dave has a very careful and methodical approach to laying down heaps of rambling bullshit, and it wouldn't be the best idea to try and capture that in a single 11-minute pilot.

To another end, I think the inclusion of the narrator was written very well, but I'm not happy with how the VA delivered their lines. I think it was an intentional choice, giving him a ridiculous 'caricature over character' voice to emphasize his place as a meta-aspect of the story, but I found the inflections obnoxious, especially in the 'note desolation plays' segment with how he said 'plundered mailbox'.